Hi Adam! I'm totally not condoning drugs, but this is funny and well staged! Some tweaks to make it even clearer: what appears on the screen of the laptop (panel 1) looks like the purchase of a rocket. Instead it should look like a rocket TRIP to purchase. Therefore, you could angle the rocket, have it with a trail of fire/smoke. In other words, that screen composition should emphasize space travel rather than rocket purchasing. Moreover, to clarify that the person is broke, you could add a small speech balloon in the left corner, above the envelope, with the tail (pointer) of the balloon pointing at the emptiness in the envelope. In the speech balloon, you'd insert "$ 0.00" to make clear that person has no money. Otherwise, everything reads quite well. In the final panel, you can make the person look a little more "trippy" (with different hand poses, for example). Off to a good start! Haha!
Hi Adam! I'm totally not condoning drugs, but this is funny and well staged! Some tweaks to make it even clearer: what appears on the screen of the laptop (panel 1) looks like the purchase of a rocket. Instead it should look like a rocket TRIP to purchase. Therefore, you could angle the rocket, have it with a trail of fire/smoke. In other words, that screen composition should emphasize space travel rather than rocket purchasing. Moreover, to clarify that the person is broke, you could add a small speech balloon in the left corner, above the envelope, with the tail (pointer) of the balloon pointing at the emptiness in the envelope. In the speech balloon, you'd insert "$ 0.00" to make clear that person has no money. Otherwise, everything reads quite well. In the final panel, you can make the person look a little more "trippy" (with different hand poses, for example). Off to a good start! Haha!
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